Not long ago, I did this weird thing I do now and then.
I rewrote a post I had already published.
Not the whole thing.
I changed one sentence. I had to. Even if no one would read it. Why?
Because it made the thing better.
I recently wrote a post about why I stopped taking pictures,
explaining it was because it got too easy.
With the now available technology, you can take virtually perfect
pictures.
Writing is – has been, and always will be – a “hand-made”
operation. It cannot be “technologically
enhanced.” It cannot ever be perfect.
That’s why it retains its appeal.
(There is a missing “descriptive” before “appeal”, but I
cannot think what it is. That’s the delicious
challenge of writing – chasing the “White Whale” of a word. Wait. How
about “… it retains its challenging
appeal”? Seems that’ll have to do, till
the right word comes along. And I will
have to change “the delicious challenge of writing”, so it’s not “challenge”
twice. Do you see how tricky this is?)
Writing a not-long-ago post… wait!
First, this.
When I worked on The
Cosby Show – and one of the reasons I did not work on it long – was that we
– Bill Cosby and I – would work out an episode’s storyline, then I would go off
and write the episode myself.
Then, three days before production – or less – Cosby would
come in, puff his stultifying cigar and say,
“Y’know, Camille (Cosby’s wife) and I were talking about
this last night, and it gave me a new way of doing it.”
He then laid out vastly alternative
version of the episode, after which, I would go back and, in an intensely short
period of time, rewrite the (totally viable) earlier draft.
I was furious, agonizingly “under the gun” for no explicably
sensible reason.
Except one.
The new version was better.
So I did it.
I cursed loudly,
but I did it.
This punishing process – passive-aggressively deliberate or
otherwise – inevitably burned me out, and I was gone in short time.
Now… before I so rudely interrupted myself…
Writing a not-long-ago post, I wrote a first draft, and
then, as is my habit, made hand-written revisions. For some reason – possibly a subsequent post
– I decided to count them.
It turns out I had made fifty-seven revisions on the first
draft of that post. I type them onto the
computer. Reading the, now, second draft
of the post, I make thirty-two subsequent changes, and I type them onto my computer. I make twenty-three revisions after the third
draft, and seventeen revisions after the fourth.
And then I am done.
Was there nothing more to revise? Perhaps – or possibly – sure. But my later revisions felt progressively
smaller, I could imagine no worthwhile improvements, so I stopped.
Some changes were word changes – tightening deletions and clarifying
additions. Some changes were “typos”,
some, left-behind words from earlier drafts, and some, “spacing” snafus. Some changes were exclusively for “rhythm”,
their belated inclusions requiring still further
rhythmic adjustments. (Someone recently
asked if I ever write poetry, to which I haughtily, though not inaccurately, replied,
“It’s all poetry.”)
(Poetry, and fooling yourself, believing it’s poetry.)
These changes – including punctuational changes –
and making two lines out of one –
oh, and adding italics
as well –
all in the service
of making it better.
Not content to just rewrite myself, I sometimes rewrite other
people as well. (“Professional
courtesy.” No charge.)
For some time, I have been working on the 1950 Disney film Cinderalla’s “A Dream Is A Wish Your Heart Makes” on the
piano. (Written by Mac David – who wrote
the lyrics to Lawman – Al Hoffman and
Jerry Livingston – who wrote the music to Lawman.)
One of the best lyrical “Openers” of all time:
“A dream is a wish
your heart makes,
When you’re fast
asleep…”
But at the end, it goes,
“No matter how your
heart is grieving,
If you keep on
believing,
The dream that you
wish will come true.”
Upon no one’s request, I changed “The dream that you wish will come true” to
“The wish that you
dream will come true.”
Why?
Because you don’t “wish a dream.”
You “dream a wish.”
With that small though necessary adjustment,
I made the song better.
Don’t you think?
The joy of finding the precise word, or the ideal turn of phrase
– while assiduously searching, or, more excitingly, after believing you have
already found it –
That’s the elating fun part of writing.
Knowing no matter what you’ve put down, it can always be
better.
Wait. “The elating fun part of writing?”
Lemme think here a moment.....
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